Vanadis

Hello there, Boo! It's beautiful; it's ugly >Ah. Beautiful and ugly: common, garden variety words. So I see that you think love is two-faced, but using such weak, overused words ...

Hello! I have to say I thought this was pretty good. You've got a good start on describing the emotion: the sadness, hopelessness, showing that the love still exists. You ...

Hello! I'm just going to post my comments in a quote for now: The electric purple In his argyle veins >This is cool. It reminds me of when I see ...

Hello Timmy. Welcome to YWS! I hope your stay is pleasant! So on to the poem. It's as June says: it's refreshing that it's not blaming the other person. Your ...

Hi you. I really enjoyed this. I don't think it was too hard to read. The rattling on in some places and the few large-ish words peppered throughout fit marvelously ...

Hello there. I like that you're centering the poem around the pen, and not the girl or her feelings, yet even so you still manage to tell us about her. ...

Hello Kat. I'm Van. ^^ First I'm going to put comments into your work, like so: A pile of bones is talking to me, blinking. >I like these lines. It ...

Hello! So this is an okay concept. I often hear the phrase "sands of time" in music, see it in books and movies, so when I look at this poem ...

Hello! I really liked this piece. The idea was fresh and unique and the twist at the end was very nice! I also like they way it builds up from ...

Hello! I'm "Van" and I'll be reviewing. So I really like what you've written here. It's quite simplistic in idea, and the simple language and setup mirrors that wonderfully. The ...

Hello you! Okay, yes, it was cheesy, I agree; but it was cheesy in a different, unique way. I like the way the lines are set up and the rhythm. ...

A prose-poem! Wow, I haven't seen one of those in a while. This is very good. I can't honestly say I'd change anything; I like how you personify the pea ...

I woke my dude up from the other room laughing so hard! This is epic, Jiggy! (for instance, someone falling down stairs as they backed away in terror) My absolute ...

*glomps.* Leza! Okay. So I like this. It's nice. Reminds me of just a lone sailor, staring out into the sea, having a conversation with it because a) there's no ...

Hello. Although poems full of questions are usually off-putting, I have to agree with empress on this one. Since your title was an answer, basically, it was okay (to me) ...