ToritheMonster

Wow, this poem was really good. I love how the narrator's memories are very bittersweet, and how one side of her brain views the man as charming, the other as ...

I gotta say, this is probably one of the best poems I have ever read on YWS. Yous style is amazing, your meter flawless, and your imagery was intriguing. I ...

Hi! Well, first of all, I have a comment to make: This really should either go in Fan Fiction or Romantic Fiction. Also, this was a lot of text to ...

Wow! This was really, really good. i couldn't really find any problems with it, other than some easy grammar mistakes the you could catch if you just go over it. ...

Hi! I only have time for a quick review. Here goes: Overall, this was very good. However, you use an extra "Did god" in the first stanza, which is unnecessary. ...

Nice work! i don't have time to do a full review, but a few points: --you have many easily fixable grammar and punctuation mistakes. -- You don't put paragraphs between ...

What's this? A new member? Ooh, fresh meat! OK, so your poem isn't that bad, but it's pretty far from good. Your style is kind of confusing, jumping around, switching ...

Ooh, a poem with an interesting title! *reads* OK, here's the verdict: I thought the poem flowed nicely, and the lines were well balanced. However, I began rhyming at the ...

Hi! I must say, I really like what you have so far, no matter how short it is. Your descriptions made me feel like I was right there, and it's ...

hmmmm... like your last review said, this is extremely cliche-y. I think if you change it around a little, it could be good, though. Here's what i suggest: a nice ...

Wow-- this was really good. Please post more! Your grammar and spelling seemed prefect, and the entire story was engrossing! What impresses me even more was that you wrote, in ...

Hi there! ooh, cool title! *reads* Wow! This was really good! I just have a few suggestions: Try to keep your lines shorter. long lines are daunting to the reader, ...

Hey! I can see that you've been bullied and/or witnessed it. I can see that you were venting when you wrote this. however: poems don't need to rhyme1 you try ...

Well... you're into religion, i can see, and that's great. However, the whole "Christ can see your sins" thing might mildly offend some people, and i think you tried a ...

Hi there! First of all, I love your title, although that probably seems redundant by now.However, your story, to quote the last post "is built on sunshine and daisies." which ...