Published November 18, 2009
Feeling the pain of death that never dies.
Hearing the sounds of a million cries.
The truth hidden within your eyes.
under all the horrible lies.
Eating away your precious life.
Have you forgotten Christ?
Or is it that you think he is blind?
You can never hide your crime.
He sees everything.
How you try to fake a smile,
but truly you are miserable inside.
He sees your pain.
Even when you cry in the rain.
Don't hide behind your sins in shame.
It is never to late to change.
Except him as he has excepted you.
Your days will no longer feel like nights.
So let him guide you into the light.
He will lead you to the truth.
Just believe in him as he believes in you.
Happiness and love wait for you above.
Can't continue living without being forgiven.
Don't wait to long.
Before your chance is gone.
Is it worth your next life,
feeling the pain of a death that never dies?
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Well... you're into religion, i can see, and that's great. However, the whole "Christ can see your sins" thing might mildly offend some people, and i think you tried a little too hard to make the lines ryhme. I know poetry doesn't have to have a meaning, but yours really doesn't seem to say much besides "CONFESS!!!! CONFESS!!!" However, there are some good points:
"feeling the pain of a death that never dies"
is a great line,and overall, you show a lot of promise. Keep writing-- you have talent!