ToritheMonster

Woah! This was really long! Can you break it up into parts? Then I can do a good review. It seems good so far. --Dreamy Oh! And Welcome to YWS! ...

Oh good, this is shaping up.;) I'm liking this so far! It's sort of becoming... I dunno... darker. More mysterious. You're a good writer, and thanks for not making them ...

Hm, this was pretty good. I agree with Titch's nitpicks, I'd go over those. Also, I kinda thought that your writing had a mildly feminine touch to it... and so ...

This was cool! I suggest reading it over, you can catch the mistakes yourself, they're all pretty obvious. I liked your style-- speaking without quotes. That was cool. I also ...

This was sweet! Just a few nitpicks: "Those months had been amazing, like my wildest cliché fantasies but ending it had been the right thing for both of us." should ...

Hey! I'll be brief, too. First! You need to fix your capitalization and punctuation. Next! Your rhyming wasn't very good. It sounds like you just really needed rhyming words, and ...

Well, I don't quite agree with Ben (sorry Ben) but I do agree with everyone else. Add some imagery! This also just seemed cold, and flat to me. Round it ...

Ah. Cynical-mindedness. I actually liked this, even though it wasn't very well-written. You need to fix your punctuation, and your last line is completely off-meter. I, just personally, think it's ...

Chicken Fries? Those sound good. Sorry. I get off-track easily. Nice poem! It was pretty, I liked you imagery and metaphores. You need to work on your sentences, though. You ...

I agree, this was really pretty. You certainly do Have Your Words (pardon the pun), and you sure know how to use them. Bittersweet, and that's how I like my ...

Hey! I liked this too! It had a foreign tint to it, and it was fiery like I think you intended it to be. Your imagery was good too.This was ...

I gotta agree with lilldeh. I didn't like the message either.I also felt mildly offended. That said, some of the best works of art are offensive to some-- this isn't ...

I chuckled as well. *chuckles more* Nice little poem. Good way to vent anger!Hm. That's probably a bit more effective than yelling at people. Write poetry about them... Nice job.For ...

This was absolutely beautiful!It made me happy, and I really wanted to be in that place you were describing. Your imagery was magnificent,your meter lovely. Hm. I probably sound like ...

Hey! I'm here to review. But sorry, I'm going to have to be harsh like Miss Mizz. This sounded like you grabbed as many big words as you could find ...