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Wow! This is AMAZING! There are only a few things I need to say about this one. You seem to have a longer line then shorter line pattern going on ...

Oh, my goodness! This is amazing! I love the theme you're working with! I (unfortunately) can so relate to what you're saying here. My only comment is that there are ...

This is a nice poem! I confess, I pretty much just like Dr. Who because it reminds me of Quantum Leap, but it's usually pretty good. Overall, I thought your ...

Great job, love it! It's short and beautiful, and it doesn't make me sit around for hours deciphering the language. So it basically has everything I like in a poem, ...

Wow, this is really good! I'm just hooked on these stories, can't wait to find out what will happen next! Overall, this is really good and it flows well. But, ...

Wow, this is intense! But I like it! I would love to see more of this as it comes out! The prophecy line needs to be all italicized. Also, I ...

This is a very interesting piece! But at the same time, I can't help but wonder if there's more to it. I feel like the point the poem's trying to ...

I hope you're not talking about yourself. :( But, I believe it's possible to write things so depressing even when you're feeling fine. I've written many, many pieces, some of ...

Brilliant! Love the idea, love the concept, love the suspense. But, everyone else is right, it needs paragraph breaks. I mean it SERIOUSLY needs paragraph breaks. I could help you ...

Really good! Is there a common tune this is to or did you make it up? "I try to tell what's goin' on, but you don't wanna hear me" is ...

I love this! Can't wait to see what happens next! A few things to say. Your verb tenses are confusing. Sometimes you use present, others you use past, sometimes both ...

'If you live to sleep Why don't you sleep? To try is to fail, to suceed means you need a new dream We move and move and never slow, We ...

"He sighed again, a sigh full of pity for Auxi, then turned out the lamp and tried to sleep, even if it evaded him." Also, I really like that quote. ...

This some very interesting stuff! I especially like the character development going on here! Here are my notes on characters: Auxi: she's pretty cute, but she strikes me as being ...

This quote aids the theory that there is such a thing as "academic frustration", but there is not such a thing as a helpless student. I think you meant, "no ...