TigersMoon

The title doesn't need to be in all caps. "The blazing sun stares right into my eyes while my sunglasses are nowhere to be seen in my back pack so ...

Very good. Can't wait for the next chapter. "Especially since her thoughts were so scattered with worry that she couldn't focus on anything else. But the bus was now slowing ...

I really liked this piece. That's all I wanted to say here. Capital in first line, second line, third line, capital in every line. This takes away from the poem, ...

Very nice. I haven't seen an extremist but I'm sure there out there. As for artists, I've seen \(-,_,-)/ and faces way more complicated. I don't normally use them, but ...

Secret Of The One, we meet again. In accordance with tradition, I have to say, I love this story and everything in it. Seriously. Now on to other matters. "It ...

Hey there! I'm here for a review. First off, I'd like to say this was an extremely entertaining short story. I don't know why, but I couldn't take my eyes ...

Beautiful poem. ABCB is my favorite rhyme scheme. Some of it was a little off, but overall this was great. I like "Daylight faded into oblivion." It's such a pretty ...

"Trying to finished all her heavy homework" Change "trying" to "tried." "No one hold a party" Change it to "No one was holding a party." This story is quite unusual, ...

"The men that were behind her, had faces as if chiseled from stone. Even their voices reminded her of stone." Replace one of the "stone" so there's no repetition. I ...

Great story, interesting events. I'll start with the nitpicks: "...best school called WhiteStead [which I finally went there]." That part seemed a little weird to me. I can't really tell ...

Story of my life. I've abandoned so many books because of this. I do enjoy the way you describe the ideas as light or fire. It gives me a cozy ...

Yay! Next chapter! I love this story already so I can't find nitpicks with the plot, although "They can’t even prove I’m one, without raising mother back from the dead," ...

Very good prologue, save for the fact it doesn't have a hook. Nothing urges readers onward into the book. There's questions, but ones I wouldn't care if I didn't know ...

Nice hook. Asleep for 6 years. Great. In the flashback, there's a lot of "I" You might want to get rid of some. "how long have I been asleep?" That ...

First nitpicks. Sythril can just waltz into a heavily guarded place? Sure you said he isn't ordinary, but he just jumps into the fort. "Sythril has this energy/power he can ...