TigersMoon

Hey, TigersMoon here for a review! Firstly, the nitpicks. She shifted away uneasily. You can get rid of “uneasily” because in the context, it’s easy to see she’s uncomfortable. (I’m ...

Hello! TigersMoon here for a review. First off, you're beginning was good. Full of action; keeps reader entertained. Now, on to the nitpicks. He tensed, feeling the cords around his ...

Luna was an amazing jumper, I knew we could do this course in our sleep. Instead of a comma after "jumper" you need a semicolon. "Aubrey now jumping on Luna, ...

Salutations! I'm here for a review! "Completely covered in fog, the planet was relatively ignored until recently." This seems a bit unrealistic to me, because that's the type of thing ...

Hi, Falconer! I'm here for a review. "One day, a mysterious woman with black hair, pale skin, and blue eyes came to LAB." This too much description added in very ...

This is a sad piece of poetry, but it's very well written. I love how you build up after the speaker has seen the rose and just end it saying, ...

Hey! Tigers coming to review. First off, I love how you start with a quote from Frodo, because I love those movies. Anyway, "I dream of things friends say I ...

Hello! Tigers here for a review. "The owner, Boss Halberd, was the only man who could run it as smoothly as it could, has and will." Comma between "has" and ...

Hi Giuneapig, TigersMoon here for a review. I like the over arching theme of when and how to die. From just that we get to know a lot about Agatte. ...

Note that I have not read the other chapters, so I will not be mentioning anything about plot. Still, I have to say this was well put together. I was ...

Hello President! First, this wasn't long at all. Actually short compared to many other chapters that are on here. "'Really though, what’s your-''Go away.' I mumbled, tightening my face into ...

Hello Makayla! I'm here for a review. First, I'm going to say I like the idea of this little poem. It was simple and reminds me of how great being ...

I loved this. I can relate to all of it (which is why the title gripped my attention). It's so...so... how I feel. I can't explain. It's like this poem ...

Hello! I'm here for a review (duh). Let's start with the nitpicks. "you have to face few more difficulties than other species as you have got few more advantages than ...

This is excellent! I absolutely love it! I can't find a single thing wrong. Wow. I looked over it three times but I just didn't see anything. Congratulations. "I have ...