Threnody

Hmm. You got quite off topic when you randomly popped in the fact that the brownies had killed/destroyed their mother. It was very alarming when I was happily reading about ...

It looks like everyone's caught the grammar mistakes. I thought this was a very clever story! I loved the concept and the how well it flowed. The idea was cool. ...

Very simple yet charming. It plays with the century old concept of the "key to my heart" It is a bit cliched but I still enjoyed reading it. It had ...

Oh my. Very well written. I loved the entire concept. Just a few corrections~ How could I have imagined this --the sense of peace and how much cleaner the air ...

Oh wow. Umm... erm... heheheh, uhhh. *Deep breath.* Don't kill me for saying this but this song was very morbid. It did however flow very well. I don't know... maybe ...

very simple yet meaningful poem. I liked reading it very much. A few corrections in bold; It's on the streets, In people you meet, Even in those heartless souls. When ...

I think that this was very heartfelt and sweet. It definitely held a lot of emotion. (why is "a lot" spelled that way!?) Here's a few corrections; I remember poetic ...

Oh! Welcome to YWS! I hope you're having fun! And to the poem... Cool format! I love this poem! It's so flowing. Just a bit of corrections; chemicals made to ...

Very beautiful. I loved the concept a lot. Here's some corrections in bold; I’d never liked keeping diaries. Same thing with blogs, really. They take far too (up doesn't fit) ...

Hello. I got here a bit late so it seems as if everyone's got all the problems. I think that this was a really nice beginning. You gave everyone a ...

Very Nice! And Welcome to YWS by the way. I liked this poem a lot. It was very descriptive. Although the formatting was really off. I fixed it. I think ...

I loved this poem! It was perfect! It was jammed with emotion and it wallowed in feeling. It flowed so beautifully and smoothly. Er, seconds? This was astonishing! I absolutely ...

I feel the same way. That game is so annoying. It gets on my nerves. My brother is obsessed but I resorted to finding different more creative ways of deforming ...

Oh my. This poem was SO good! It was beautiful, it flowed well, it had a wonderful story, and it made you think. Just one comment; Leave me in my ...

Very beautiful and sensual. It seemed like you could see everything happening. So descriptive but in such few words. Lovely. Just a few things I corrected/edited; The wave's mighty roar ...