Threnody

From your home you went into a hidden life with your new family of eight. Dread and terror never left your mind until that dreadful August day. When you were ...

Hello! About this poem... quite smooth and lovely. Here's my input. The corrections are in bold.~ His eyes are colorless, Like the sky when it threatens to rain, But then, ...

The moments are passing. The days are dwindling. I've lost who I'm being. I've forgotten who I'm becoming. The lies forever surround me. The false truth chokes like a weed. ...

Hello! I completely reformatted this for you. It flows better and looks a lot less cramped than before. Also, the rhyme scheme works like this too. Also, I changed some ...

Hello! So, about this poem. I liked it. It told a very powerful story. Here's some comments. Carry away my body Throw it in a ditch Take a piece of ...

Oh! I absolutely adore this new addition! Very creative, lovely job. I honestly don't have any comments. The grammar Nazi's shall be following behind me though. Little comment actually~ Sean ...

Hi Again, I thought this chapter was lovely. You definitely paid more attention to details! The entire concept of the charm bracelet was very creative. Loved it. And yes, about ...

Hi again Amon. Just wanted to see what you were going at for the next chapter. This was actually more appealing than the first chapter. Problem: It's not supposed to ...

Hello Amon. I felt the need to review one of your works. I can't review stories that well, namely because I overall prefer poetry. But here's my basic thinking after ...

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Wonderful poem. I liked the entire concept! (I would, mind you) One problem- some of the rhymes are too forced. Like see and tree. You should make that flow smoother ...

Oh my! This overall was a very beautiful poem! I loved it so much! It's got rhythm and it flows beautifully! The rhyme scheme works fine, don't worry. It gives ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! Hope you're enjoying it! Onto this story. I've read Harry Potter so don't worry, I know what I'm talking about. This seemed a bit too obvious. ...

Here you go, as requested~ And hey! Welcome to YWS! I trust everything is going well and you're enjoying it? And to the poem- Looks like everyone's got the grammar ...