TheMythMaster

Hey, @VagueFairee thanks for your review! I think you made a good point about giving more dialogue from Fintan and the Generals conversation, I was kind of experimenting with a ...

Hi, @Plume, thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked the worldbuilding so much, this story is actually a relatively new idea of mine, but I did steal a lot ...

Hey @Liminality. Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked the chapter. And you pointed out most of the things I thought needed some work, mainly the punctuation ...

I%u2019m not sure why that do,ment is all garbled?

Hey thanks for the review! I%u2019m glad u like it, Magnus is picky about food, but he likes potatoes

Hey thanks for the review! This really helped! (:

k i fixed that piece of dialogue

hiya pages, thanks for the review! you made some good points ill definitely work on. and I'm glad you like Magnus/Alpine

hey, thanks for the review! um with the part about jumping off a cliff and stuff it was actually supposed to be Harrison talking, I think some of the formatting ...

hey, thanks for the review @TheWarriorMingan and as for the HP thing, no I've been really trying to make sure this doesn't look like a fanfic or knockoff, though that ...

Sounds cool (:

also im not sure why it part of that review is all a quote but i think its just a glitch

it's a very nice poem, sums things up nicely. You don't seem to have any grammatical errors, and it rolls off the tongue well. great job! (: -Myth

thanks, I will definitely redo this and I haven't done much editing so there is likely to be lots of grammatical errors. thanks ( :

hey thanks for the review, your write most of the time prologues happened a long time before the actual story, but this was more supposed to draw readers in and ...