Hello, MythMaster!
I found this part a bit shorter than the last one, but Magnus is working on a secret project, and he's so caught up in it that he's forgetting to eat. Well, I hope he remembers next time.
Bang! Shakespeare dumped a tray of food down on Alpines desk, “em, what is this?” He inquired confusedly
I like how you started this off by appealing to the senses.
“I will eat” Magnus flicked his wrist and the whole tray as well as everything on it levitated so he could take a better look at everything,
It looks like he does really have superpowers! Thank you for capitalizing the sentences (don't forget your commas). Also, why is a potato the food of Magnus' choice?
Overall, this part is written well, although a bit more descriptions of their surroundings would be nice.
-Truly, Mingan
Follow your heart, and nothing can go wrong. (concerning writing)
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