TheClosetKidnapper

Hey, Kisha! Here as requested! This was good. I liked the bird line and polar bear line best. Polar bears are awesome, fierce and loving as you said. But onto ...

MM! Proper as promised! Yes, there are a few mistakes, but if this were perfect, it'd be posted in a magazine or an anthology instead of a website designed to ...

VAMP! As requested... Awesome. I'd never of thought to tell this story through the mirror's point of view. It's interesting and puts a new spin on the classic tale. Now, ...

Hey, Rocky here again! This was good. Personally, I believe the first chapter was better, but this definitely moves the plot along some. What stood out the most to me ...

MM! Awesome. I've already told you. *nods* Pix covered the grammar pretty well, so I'm going to focus on a few other things. The one that really stands out to ...

This is very moving. It tells the story of something most can't bear to think about and tells it beautifully. You have excellent word choice and decent rhythm. The rhyme ...

Hey! Up here, as requested! I overall thought this was a great piece. It was interesting and makes me want to read more. As Shearwater said, though, the comic relief ...

Hey, Up here, as requested! I'd like to start out by saying this is a very intriguing piece. It leaves off with the possibility of a second chapter, if this ...

MM! Awesomeness. That's all I can say. It's short, but you made it so that we have to come back and read more. From an editing standpoint, the only thing ...

I really liked this. It was filled with emotion and tells a great tale of heartbreak. The only thing I could possibly suggest is to possibly add a bit more ...

I really, really liked this. It tells you just enough to be satisfied and leaves the rest uncovered to keep you reading. I'd really liked to follow this story to ...

Up again! This is also very good. The shock is a little confusing until you get to the third to last paragraph, but it's still very good. Once again, the ...

Hey, Up here as promised! : ) This is amazing. Plain and simple. It's a great way to start off the story and I really really like the ending. The ...

Biggles! This is good, I can't wait to read more! As Sepherene said, there were a few gramatical errors, but that's normal and easily fixable. : ) The only other ...

Hey, Up&Out here for a review. Overall, this is a pretty good piece. The only thing I could say is that the italisized line gets pretty repetitive and this poem ...