Tenyo

Heey Nour! If you want to improve your english then you're on the right track finding your way to yws. I learn more of other languages from translating poetry and ...

Ilumi! You don't hold back, do you! What I love most about this is the power in it. You've made good use of every word and there isn't a syllable ...

Jalmoc

Rawr! Okay, here it goes. As as as... Imagine each sentence is a single thought and break them up. The trouble with 'as' sentences is that they're not very flexible, ...

Hey Archie! Verse One: The lines here seem quite detatched, rather than continuing on one from another. I feel like there's only half a scene being set and half a ...

Hey Tronks! I haven't read your other chapters, so forgive any ignorance if I misinterpret something. Conversations in literature- Aren't the same as conversations in text. I'd say it's one ...

Hey there! Interesting work. Language: Everybody has a style of writing that suits them best. For some it's simpler, some it's more complex. Some people command the english language as ...

Oohh, that's interesting! At first I was thinking it was kind of cute, and then it turned into some kind of surreal nightmare but I like the effect it had. ...

Perse

Hey there stevie Presentation: This is a big chunk of text. You should split it into smaller paragraphs and include line breaks to make it more readable. Such huge blocks ...

Hey Redbird! Opening: I like the voice that the story is told in. It makes me feel like I'm actually listening to someone talking rather than reading a history report. ...

Hey Thess! I think the main issue with this piece is that there is waay too much action going on. Ideally you should balance your writing between action, dialogue, description ...

Hey Kana! So, the title... Always give your work a title, always. A title is a huge thing because it's the difference between someone browsing past your work and someone ...

Hi. I noticed you've commented on a few works, but haven't recieved any reviews. So I'll review for you. 'They feel no man' - What does this mean? As a ...

Hey there! I've never been one to follow the rules of script writing, but here's what I picked up. #Write boldly In a novel it's important to not dash around ...