TalaPaulwic

This is very powerful. It's oozing with emotion, and it's easily transmitted to the reader. I like that. Your grammar could use a little bit of tidying, but that's pretty ...

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You start the piece in present tense. That's okay. Not a common thing to be used outside of chose your own adventure books. Not to much later you switch to ...

[TalaPaulwic enters from camera right.] Just little bits of detail like that could have made your script more effective. The problem with reading scripts is that you have no idea ...

Oh wow. At first it sounded like it was a by-stander. Then the progression into being a murderous bastard. You told a long story in three paragraphs. An introduction, a ...

Alright. Hello there. I am TalaPaulwic, and I will be reviewing you today. I have a few things that I would like to go over about this. I'm hoping I ...

Hey, I don't like poetry, but I feel I may as well review it. It still has to follow the basic rules of grammar... right? All but one of the ...

Well I like the drama, but it seems kind of cliched. I've seen a hundred things where it opens with a scene like that, and then when you're on the ...

This is as good as all the other poetry I've read. I have a sheer, almost irrational hate against poetry so that's not saying a lot. It's impossible to follow, ...

Hello, I'm Tala, I hope you find my review helpful. Your sentence structure is lacking, and repeats itself quite a bit. I know this is how the original literature is, ...

The notes sound a bit plain, but it's the most detailed set of lyrics I've seen. I'd play it, but I don't have a guitar. I can hear the music ...

I can't say something that has not been mentioned before. The "Breath on" looked like a typo, it should be Breathe however. Um what else... I'd like to hear music ...

I don't normally like poetry. But I found this rather... interesting. It was different. I never imagined a car crash like that. And it was short so my really REALLY ...

I had no idea what was going on. As in a general theme of things. But as far as short term goes, yeah I could understand and see the actions. ...

There are a FEW grammar issues. But I saw past that. You know. I don’t like the stereotype of both the girl, and pictured guy. But I love the ending. ...