Young Writers Society

TU everyone for the songs names and advice nice to hear people playing it. I'm not possesive about the chords- so feel free to change, add, develop if you like but you cant have the lyrics :L (those i am possesive about)

Ella
XOX

This is a nice acoustic song to play (I did play it)

Subconscious Confession

The above is what I would title this song if I wrote it.

Those lyrics were awesome!!! I'd play it but I can't play my guitar yet... At all... It's sad really. But the lyrics were epic!! I loved them but I couldn't help but imagine it with piano... weird... sorry. Oh and my song title idea has already been mentioned 'The Question' and I can't think of anything else but I'll let you know!! Laters and great song!!!

You can never have too many ideas

X

The notes sound a bit plain, but it's the most detailed set of lyrics I've seen. I'd play it, but I don't have a guitar. I can hear the music in my head, assuming that I'm hearing it right. Maybe it was that one ACDC song... I hated that song... so much.

Anyways the lyrics are interesting, and you've had good ideas for a name, so I'll spare you my meaningless ideas.

I really liked the song but i'm afraid i don't really have any constructive criticism for it. i do have a question though; i tried playing it and have to admit to getting a bit confused when you say pluck the strings do u mean all at once or one after the other? anyway i really just wanted to suggest some more titles (unless you've got one now?). My only ideas that haven't already been said are
"Times That We Had" ? or "The Question" ?

Can't post a complicated review right now, but I also don't think it needs one. I love it. Especially the ending. It's probably one of the best breakup (it is a breakup song, right?) songs I've ever heard/read. I'll try playing it a little bit later. Kudos on a brilliant song! Keep writing!

Oh, and for a title, I would simply say, "Us".

Jamon
Teh Wozzinator

Does it have a capo? that's why its not sounding right when I practice it!!

lol okay and my brother restrung my guitar for me so we're all go for busking after halfterm (:

VERSE:
I’m the way you know
The look she gives you
Is telling you “Yes”
But what do I know?

CHORUS
G Am C
I know that I miss us
D
Together
G Am
I know that I hate you
(those chords are the same throughout the chorus)
So much, right now
I know that I’d never
Do it again
But, think of those
Times that we had

and when im practising it, i really cant get the vocals playing out right :/ am I just being stupid or does it change? xxxx

I just remembered: capo fret 1.

Ella
XOX

no, like them

thanks

Ella
XOX

First, I shalls bring my guitar in Friday.

Second, awesome song.

It's a shame cos where you said "One Plus One" it made me think of this awesome album by Badly Drawn Boy (my favourite one by him actually) called One Plus One Is One, and that would be awesome for the song. But I think that One Plus One would work too. When I title a song I generally just pull out my favourite words or phrases from the lyrics and maybe change them around a bit to sound more, y'know, epic, so here goes;

One Plus One
Test Run
We Answered The Question [Now I'm Asking It Again] < doesn't have to have the bracketed part.
ooh...One Plus One Makes One? (not quite Badly Drawn Boy you could always spell it differently or summin)
Together We Are [Apart We Are Not]

There. I'll stop now cos I could be here forever trying to come up with titles xD

Your right about the typo btw but i just didnt notice it at the time, thankyou for ponting it out .

Also, I will play it in music for you if lellynor brings her guitar in on friday because im not bringing an adult electric and an amp up to upper school

Its not you, its us has a problem because i already used that one in Letters and i cant realy reuse lines like that because they are so different from my usual style :S and it sounds like a lily allen song or album title or something. But good one anyways.

Ella
XOX

title, it's not you, it's us?

you shall have to play this to me in friday in music, cause i'm not that great at putting the chords to the lyrics
okay edits (:

VERSE
Am C
I’m your crying shoulder
Em G
Soaking my skin

I knwo you can't really make it make sense properly in a song like this, But maybe just have 'I'm you're crying shoulder, you're soaking my skin'? because otherwise yeah...


'I’m the smile, in the
Corner of your lips
The one never quite
Appears' The one THAT never quite appears?


BRIDGE:
(Bridge chords during the next four lines)
Together we answer
The Question
But apart we’re just
One plus one

Love that ^

okay I need to stop now, sorry that was short! I will be back! xxx