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Re: The Hybrids (chapter 1)
I really enjoyed this chapter, and I want to read more. It said Chapter One, so I had to review it. :) Anyways, your formatting is fine, normal prose, but ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: In the beginning (prequel to the boxes)
This was a really interesting and well-written prequel. I haven't read chapter one, so I thought this would be a good place to start. There really weren't a lot of ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Dancing In the Minefields- chap 1
I really enjoyed this! It's finally Review Day, and I'm finding lots of stuff to review. I saw that this was Chapter 1, so I had to review it. This ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Prank Wars
Well, um, okay? I've been reading a lot of dark poetry, but I wanted to read a script. I wanted to laugh, so I clicked on this. First of all, ...
Oct 21, 2013 -
Re: The Heart is the Culprit
Oh my God, this was good. And weird. Really weird, but still good! I've been reading lots of dark poetry in the last few months, and this wasn't a perfect ...
Oct 18, 2013 -
Re: The Scarred Face.
I really enjoyed this poem! I've been reading a lot of darker poetry these last few weeks, reviewing the first dark poem in the green room, and this popped up. ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Dark Night
Well, I thought this piece was quite interesting, and I enjoyed it. I've been reading dark poetry, so I saw your description and immediately clicked on it. There are grammar ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: The Piano Is Black
Wow, I thought this was great. Still recovering, whoo! Anyways, this was a BEAUTIFUL piece, and I really enjoyed it. I'm not a fan of peotry, but this really moved ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: Peace
I thought this was really cute! There are just a few issues. First of all, this isn't really an essay, it's more of a short writing piece. I'm not really ...
Oct 3, 2013 -
Re: [D]ead Chapter One - It's Started
I was really cpnfused with this script. First of all, you're formatting is totally off, especially for a screenplay. See, when you write, "Ren: (I was sleeping like usual…my older ...
Oct 2, 2013 -
Re: The Adventures of Felix Van Doren: Zombies!
Well . . . I did enjoy this script, but I was a bit confused. First of all, your formatting is a bit off, even though it's a stage script. ...
Sep 30, 2013 -
Re: The League Chapter 2
Really great job on this Bella! Looking through quickly, I saw no grammar mistakes, great job! I think you did another great job with this chapter, and I just love ...
Aug 17, 2013 -
Re: To Free A Soul
This is a nice scene, but it could do with a few revisions. First of all, this is not correct formatting-- even for a play. I actually think this would ...
Aug 16, 2013 -
Re: The League Chapter One
PROTEIN NUGGETS! I really love this piece Bella, and I'm excited for more. If you hadn't explained to me the whole situation of Athiria City, I would be a bit ...
Aug 15, 2013 -
Re: Doctor Who: The Daleks' Prize
ARGH! Sorry to say, but the only reason I read this was because it was a Doctor Who fanfic and a screenplay. It was a bit witty, but overall, I'm ...
Aug 15, 2013