PEACE
The quest for peace has been an adventure for long, mistaken. Everyman to him sees peace as a situation where there’s safety and danger and conflict are but passed. A moment where no one contradicts one another and everyman agrees to one idea. Forgetting that perfection can never be attained lest re-defined in personal words, conflicts are inevitable, clashes of ideas are inescapable, and silence would always be broken even by the sound of the wind. Then one asks what peace is? Peace is the ability one has to find joy even when in mayhem, the ability to hear silence even in the market, the ability to find comfort, is discomfort, the ability to smile even in when in agony.
From the north to the south, east to the west, the bad or good people, the powerful and the commoners irrespective of cultures and race, norms and traditions, one thing common is the quest for peace.
The issue that draws us back is the over superiority of some race and the inferiority complex of the others, leaving out, ingredients; understanding and respects for once culture. Lives has been lost, properties, destroyed, all waiting for the end to justify the means, fighting for an unreasonable course. When the means takes away everything, what has the end to justify?
Who enjoys the justice?
Everyone’s afraid, fear consuming the hearts of men and minds and lest we conquer fear and understand the chaos, peace would always and forever be an endless adventure..
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I thought this was really cute! There are just a few issues.
First of all, this isn't really an essay, it's more of a short writing piece. I'm not really sure what it is, but I know it's a little too short and weirdly fomatted to be an esay.
Next, at the end of the essay, you write "endless adventure.. " You need three periods to create proper ellipses.
Aside from that, this piece is really good! I love the artsy writing and flowing language, especally
"Peace is the ability one has to find joy even when in mayhem, the ability to hear silence even in the market, the ability to find comfort, is discomfort, the ability to smile even in when in agony. "
That has beautiful context, and I would like to read more of your work.
Thanks a lot for writing this!
Hi conceptane,as you wish DK here with review on your short-essay about peace.
Let's start from the first introduction of your essay;
* I have no idea what you tried to say here.Do you mean that 'it's just a mistake?'
You also lack of the important points that should exist in the essay. The truth is, it's just not satisfying or fulfilling the context as a perfect essay. Please work hard in the use of grammar and improve the delivery of essay to make it more interesting to read.
You also need to balance the sentences and paragraphs in your essay.Try to see how long is the paragraph at the beginning compared to the content.Keep it up!
kudos,cheers.
thanks