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That was well written and flowed nicely. My only problem is the lack of any real plot (so far we've had a woman look in the newspaper) - but as ...

I rarely read poetry, but I saw the title and... Well, there are two version to this story. The long one and the short one. - 'That was a very ...

I believe the female equivelent of 'guys' is, in fact, 'gals' ;). Personaly, I have no idea abut future chapters. It's your story, you know what you want to do ...

Wow - that was really good :). Here's some observations I made, By now London covers most of England Really? Well that’s depressing. London really smells. Sleeping…curled up every night…. ...

You need the use the words 'fit' and 'fine' at some point (in fact, they're the two most commonly used compliments of looks... mainly cos 'beautiful' sounds cheesy and 'pretty' ...

Another good story 8). But filled with lots of typos. I don't know if you already do this, but I find the best way to catch typos is to print ...

Another good chapter 8). But, here's some mistakes I noticed: 'I like it when things are just in the right place , W hen things aren a; t just R ...

Cool story 8). I liked it :D. Anyways, I found one spelling mistake: 'I mean, doe sit say anything about what fear can do to a person?' Is that meant ...

Nice :). One prob: line five in the chorus has 'ANd' where it should just be 'And' ;).

An interessting take on the Alice story :). And I really like that it opened up with a poem 8). I do have a couple of gripes though. My first ...

Heh - a lot of the advice I gave you in your last piece seems redundant now - this one is a lot better :). My only problem is the ...

Like Reich said, remember to give each new speacher a new line. Looky 8): "Mistress Maria." he greeted her. She nodded, "Is something wrong?" she asked him. He nodded, "May ...

I can see you have plenty of potential :). Okay, I have two things to say about this story: 1) Stick to the same tense (you kept on switching between ...

More? Please? Anyways, let us see now... I'm too lazy to go back and check your other sections, so I'll only spell check your last one :). "Get away from ...

#7 Anyone who breaks the law, has to fix it. #8 Swearing is now illegal. #9 When in England, don't forget to take an umbrella. Cos English nannies can fly ...