StupidSoup

Are you okay with reviews on this? I wanted to review it but it seems a bit personal so I would like to ask your permission first. Thanks!.

There is nothing that hasn't already been said. Wonderful work. We're all behind you.

Very nice, a great start. However, the poem feels like a draft rather than a finished product. Memories like hurt and depression have a lot more to them than imagery. ...

Just a quick note, you might not want to name one of your characters Cervix. I know you don't mean it in an inappropriate way but it is much easier ...

Me and my extremely limited knowledge of songwriting tried singing this all gospel like. Is the song good? Yes, very. Can I sing it? Ehehehe....

A bit wordy, resulting in a loss of cohesion. Still, amazing use of symbolism and evocative imagery.

What I see has nothing to do with what everyone else sees. Reviews are relative to the reviewer. As for criticism, this is not negative, this is constructive.

The ideas here are to vague to draw any real meaning from. A good start though.

Ah. You are correct. My bad.

Sorry for the double post. YWS freaked out when I posted this.

Try sticking to the longer more descript style of verse you started with rather than shortening the lines which is what you did near the end.

Try sticking to the longer more descript style of verse you started with rather than shortening the lines which is what you did near the end.

Amazing rhyme scheme in the beginning. Trails off and becomes unimaginative near the end. Still, good work.

Nice! Cut the one who needed it most." It feels a bit clunky.