StoryWeaver13

You make a lot of good points that I TOTALLY agree with. Over the years, well...what's love anymore? Some people say it's the strongest emotion it really the weakest? Sorry, ...

In a way, shorter poems can be more difficult because you have to get right to making your point. This was really good though! I totally got the imagery and ...

Oh no, not another story I've got to keep reading!!! Haha, not that that's so much a bad thing. It was a good beginning, and the ending of it made ...

I love this, the symbolism is perfect and a little sad, because it reminds me of all the times when I was little and how I've gotten further from my ...

Great poem, really creative and I loved the symbolism. WAY less typical than the average poems that are posted pretty often (no offense intended to anyone...) Unique and beyond average. ...

This was good, just not...I don't know...anything unusual? I think finding some more elaborate words to help it stand out a little bit would help, but that's just my opinion. ...

This is a really sad little story...what makes it worse is knowing at there are a lot of true stories along these lines. :( I liked the ending a lot ...

I really like your first chapter, but I think this prologue needs some work (or just totally elliminate it from your story...you don't need it. :wink: ) Either way, just ...

I really like your story, the ending was INSANELY unpredicted by me (I live in Idaho, but nothing this excited ever seems to happen, darn it...haha). I only have a ...

Haha, sounds like my sort of train of thought! At least you seemed to kinda end each thing on a moderately positive note though. :D Yep; wet converse, freezing snow, ...

What I think a lot of stories lack nowadays is a good moral...luckily, this one carried its moral through-and-through, and I thought it was great. ;) Sad...the little boy almost ...

Wow, I really like this! It has something really, what's the word...? Well something really flowing and natural about it. Simple but elegent. I've only got one correction. "She stood ...

Like a couple of others already mentioned, a little cliché, but I liked that you used free-verse, which I've noticed a lot of people won't use. With free-verse, though, something ...

This is a great short story; something about it just has that heir of mystery and exciting foreshadowing. Your somewhat-simple style for some reason also makes it feel really personal. ...

"Success is failure tried one more time." ~Anonymous :smt001 I think you make some good points and have some strong ideas in this, but I also think that you should ...