Helluuee, Demoness here and I'll be giving you my opinion on this piece.
And I'll begin with saying.... WOW!
This poem is so powerful! You've used such great imagery and I love the sympolizm with the shadow and sun! For a love-poem this was quite epic!
I must agree with Cailey though, I do think you should split the text into more than one stanza
And I agree with Monster that "Stark" sounds a bit off and to begin with I thought it made very little sense but then I read it again and I really think it's great!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
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