StoryWeaver13

Cool, cool, cool. You said you're interested in publishing it? I think newspapers and magazines will sometimes take in short stories and stuff, particularly if you find some sort of ...

My complaints are mostly along the lines of spacing. You space it so much that it just gives it the appearance of being overwhelming and way more difficult to read. ...

Nice poem, I think the rhyme scheme was just a little off though...also just a little grammar correction that I have to bug you about :wink: Teachers have a go ...

I keep finding myself reading your stuff, ofir; keep it up, your writing's great. :wink: This was a really cool poem, the way you talk about Alice's denying reality is ...

The only thing I have to say is watch your spelling, it can be kinda distracting if there are a lot of typos and mispelled words. Either way, though, cool ...

They've already picked at the grammar and stuff (which is good, 'cause I hate doing that anyway) so no need to reiterate. Cool story, normally not my style AT ALL ...

Haha, nice. *sigghhhh* I got caught up in the Twilight series for like...three days. My parents bought the books and I had to read them (they're books, I'm an obsessive ...

I've never really been interested in romantic fiction, chick/flick stuff, but decided to give this romantic fiction section a shot. Most of the things I've seen here have been the ...

I'm not so much a fan of religious stuff in stories (not trying to be offensive...I'm a Christian too, it's just more of a preference; either way though, stick to ...

A few friendly critiques. ;) Though encased by ice. Her icy stare is always there. You'll notice you use 'ice' and 'icy', and it just doesn't make it seem so ...

Personally, I have no critiques on this poem--amazing. ;) Your wording is great and left a dramatic image in my mind. Like I said, I have no complaints--keep writing. ;)

Really good, it flows well and is fun to read; good rhythm too. Like was already pointed out, the line "is all I have to show for my persistence" is ...

a dark and morbid sort of way...either way, I love this! It's really good, almost makes me think of Edgar Allen Poe (which is a good thing--after all, he's like, ...

I thought this poem was great actually. I loved how you explained the confusion and chaos that's sort of involved in love, and how it sort of loses meaning. Another ...

I really like this poem. It has a lot of thought put into it, and I can totally relate. The rhyme scheme was a little off in parts, but other ...