StoryWeaver13

Hey, and welcome to the site! I think this was a good poem, but isn't a GREAT poem. It's just (and I've been saying this a lot lately) nothing unusual. ...

This was (to be honest...) nothing special. I got the message but didn't feel the emotion. It seemed like it was lacking something, like something should've been there that wasn't. ...

Good poem, and like the previous reviewer said, provoking. I'm not really sure as to why some things were italicized, though. Not really a distraction or issue or anything, but ...

I thought overall this was really good. I like how it begins kind of a more gentle feel, but then grows in power as it gets to its middle, fading ...

I thought this was really good; you did a nice job portaying emotion and overall the rhythm and flow worked very well. I think this could almost be classified as ...

The afternoon sun was gleaming through the vertical blinds on my window, and I could smell the fresh sea air as it circled my bedroom. It was as if the ...

Hey there, I'm (finally) back for the next chapter! Gotta say, I love it. There's still a lot we don't know about the character though: age, appearance, etc. I also ...

Typically I'm not a fan of religious pieces, but this was very well-written I'll admit. Each stanza was better than the one before, but there was no real weak point ...

Is this going to be longer? Because I feel like the story really just began. If it's not going to be expanded, I suggest coming up with some surprising twist ...

[quote]It is night time, almost three in the morning. The streets of Birchwick are peaceful. Some houses are dark where people slumber inside. Others have lights peeping out the windows. ...

To be honest, this seemed sort of more of a teenage-angst poem than anything else. I think Jagged did a good job of really touching down on the points that ...

Hey there. I looked up out of the small slit in the cabin as the dawn drifted in through . It might just be me, but I found that a ...

Haha, that is so cool!!! How did you get it to do that? Whenever I put spacing and such it takes it away...oh well, in any case this was awesome. ...

Hey there. First off, watch your capitalization. There were LOTS of sentences that started with a lowercase letter. OK, so for the rest of it... Story about two brother and ...

My problem with this is that there are a lot of lines in here that I've heard a thousand times before. It just makes the whole thing sound kind of ...