StoryWeaver13

*Applause* No, seriously, this rocked. This is why I love free verse; it breathed perfectly, with something between poetry and prose that makes it tell a story when it's only ...

Well, I really liked this. :D Typically I'm not a huge fan of poetry that's so blunt and with such short lines, but you avoided the typical problems of it ...

Have you ever read Cry, the Beloved Country? (I think that's what it's called). I didn't like the book in itself but it was also written in poetry format, so ...

Is there anybody out there, who’ll hear my urgent words, Don't need either of these commas Of a foolish species’ failure, to make a better world? Does anybody reali z ...

*Liked Hahaha this made me laugh! I have kind of have a really minor form of short-term memory loss (it takes me a week or two to typically remember things) ...

I'm an insomniac, so I like the idea, but I kind of felt like you could've said more. Then again, as a first attempt this is really good! I think ...

you broke your heart again today as you did yesterday, and the day before. contrite are you who lets lips swoon words in which you never meant; sickly and delightfully ...

I liked this a lot, and since the first reviewer did an awesome job at getting all the little stuff, I don't think I have much to complain about! I ...

This has a really pretty mental image; I love happy poetry. ^_^ On the other hand, I think you use the word "sun" too much, because even though it sounds ...

This was pretty interesting, but I don't really understand who the "me" is in this poem, and I think that's what's throwing me for a loop. Who is "me?" Anyway, ...

This might sound a little strange, but to me this almost seemed a little too...organized? It felt a little more like an essay format than a poem's, where an essay ...

This was pretty good, but I felt like you worked too hard to make it fit the mold you're trying to put it into - which is a good challenge, ...

That was pretty cool, I've done the same sort of thing with the spelling on the side and it can definitely get tricky. Here's just a couple of small suggestions: ...

I think that people tend to write a lot of angst-ridden stuff that I typically toss into the "emo" pile of literary works, but actually you articulated this pretty well. ...

I felt like this was just a little lackluster. I mean, it's not in any way a bad poem, it just doesn't add any new or unheard of concepts for ...