StoryWeaver13

I genuinely love this, and to be honest I can be picky about these types of stories. Half the time I don't even bother to try enduring a YWSer's fantasy-type ...

I like the topic, but I felt like this was almost too blunt and emotional. It felt overly dramatic and over the top at times. It would've been nice to ...

This was OK, but it's lacking anything unique. It sounds kind of angsty and typical, and I feel as though this is largely due to your rhyme scheme. It's important ...

The beginning of this, honestly, made me want to roll my eyes. The first stanza came off as being melodramatic to me, and the Romeo and Juliet reference just seemed ...

I like the message, but the way it was approached was a little typical for me. It would've been nice to see something unique, which is what typically compels me ...

I have dreams Dreams of deserted highways (I kind of don't like the repetition of "dreams" here, but that's a personal opinion) And overcast skies Where the glasses were once ...

I genuinely love this. It's very well-written, which makes it compelling - you describe things brilliantly; almost delicately or poetically. I'd definitely be willing to read more, so if you ...

This was pretty deep, but the rhythm *is* lacking here and there, and you lost the rhyme scheme a couple of times. Tweak it a little and this will be ...

~ I trudged through the undergrowth of the forest, no doubt getting scratches and stains all over my old pair on converse sneakers [I would remove "sneakers" from this part, ...

I really like this, it reads like a story and has a really genuine and true feeling to it...based on a real situation, perhaps? In any case, it had a ...

I like this! I can tell the character's pretty hard-shelled, perhaps bitter or even antisocial, and typically that turns me off - but I want to keep reading about him. ...

I love this, and it has such a great twist. Being someone with a pretty sketchy family past, I know the feeling of peering into the windows of another person's ...

I like this. Your first line I literally groaned with the words "You've got the blood of my heart on your hands," thinking to myself Dear God. Not another emo ...

This is a nice poem, but I feel like there's nothing tying one thing to the next; it needs something to give it cohesiveness. That being said, it's clear that ...

I feel like this was decent, but really stifled by your attempt to follow a strict rhyme scheme. Sometimes rhyming works, sometimes it doesn't; this case was the latter. The ...