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The beginning of this, honestly, made me want to roll my eyes. The first stanza came off as being melodramatic to me, and the Romeo and Juliet reference just seemed like a tired and lazy comparison - but that is where my list of complaints ends. I did think that this was a touching poem, and some of our lines ("the irritated pink of evening," for example) were really great. The poem's a little cliche for my taste, but then again what love poem isn't? :}
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That last line was really awesome! It was really creative and lyrical; I like this poem a lot. It might have helped to throw in an extended metaphor to weave through the stanzas to make it feel more poetic.