StoryWeaver13

Ooh, this is dripping with potential. I liked this a lot, primarily because of how well the characters are fabricated; we know virtually nothing about them, and yet I feel ...

This is very relatable and genuinely beautiful. There's a lot of personality behind these words, and a lot of sincerity that follows suit. I hope this makes it to becoming ...

I have to say that I am enamored with the formatting of this poem...it's definitely bizarre, but in a good way. ^_^ While I think some of the words were ...

You have a lot of great metaphors in this, and it's very well-written. I think that in the first stanza, it's a little odd to see "corpses" on its own ...

Interesting overview, but I would emphasize in the title that that's what this is (because you'll be turning this into a novel, correct?). In any case, this sounds a little ...

Short, sweet, and everything a prologue needs to be. I'm excited to see where this story goes and with a few grammar fixes this will be flawless.

If I'm viewing this correctly and it's a political commentary, then I have to say that while I don't agree with the perspective you seem to have it doesn't take ...

I like this. I don't love it, but I like it a lot. I personally think that it isn't lacking creatively, although structurally it could use a little work to ...

While I find it all a tad cliche (handsome daemon, beautiful girl, random sex, inevitably half-daemon-half-human child) but that doesn't mean that it wasn't well-written or compelling. In fact, I'd ...

This was really interesting....I actually found the redundancy a little too overbearing, but it was a clever twist all the same. I found myself loving your characters even though it ...

Being someone who's currently grappling with the "is there a God?" question, I thought that this was really profound. There were some points where I did almost wish that there ...

I like this. It's a funny character choice, one that many might not instantly sympathize with, but someone who has the potential to show more than one side of herself. ...

Your descriptions in this piece are beautiful. When it comes to romantic fiction, it has to be done right - subtle, honest, and not too sappy. Which you most definitely ...

Things I like: -"He is a hot tempered, skyscraper of a man who seems perfectly crafted to give Atlas a hand and take on the responsibility of holding up the ...

I really like this; it's extremely creative, with a very good sense of direction intermingled with a drifty or dreamy sort of energy. It's simple but elegant. The entire thing ...