Charlotte Florentine is the youngest daughter of a rich, influencial family, the daughter who ought to have been a boy. With no male heir to the family fortune, the riches will be inherited by the man who marries Lettie, which is the last thing she wants. Caught up in a whirlpool of humdrum parties and stuffed-shirt suitors, Lettie finds escape through her novels. She longs to be a writer, to choose her own fate, to be a heroine in her own life, not just her stories. So she hatches a plan.
Tobias Fleet is a no good, smooth-talking, pick-pocketing conman from Underearth, the filthy, impoverished factory distric hidden under the city like a dirty secret. He and his friend Seamus, a clockwork boy called an Everlast, will do anything and everything to get out of the slums, robbing the rich to give to themselves. Their goal is to get on a pirate airship and leave their squalor behind. No matter what it takes.
The sky is the limit for Aileen Farley, the gypsey captain of an infamous pirate airship. The ward of a notorious, but well-loved captain, Aileen hopes to follow his footsteps, far away from her past and the prosecution of her people. With a weakness for the downtrodden, like her adoptive father, Aileen ends up with a runaway, a thief and an Everlast on her ship, an entire army on their tails. What exactly did these kids do to get her wrapped up in this mess?
This is a steam-powered, clockwork tale of three unlikely protagonists caught up in power struggles, underground rebellions, corruption, disturbing experiments and lots and lots of secrets...
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Alright, it appears we've got ourselves a bit of a blurb situation here or at least some sort of summary to draw readers in judging by the way that this has been formatted here.
Soo...in line with the checklist challenge, I'm going to point out mostly the positives of this work here...
Alright, the main thing you've used really well here to get people's attention is creating a sense of mystery and tension here. You've hinted at some very mysterious and quite intriguing plot points and yet given nothing away making us really want to find out more here...and that works very well towards pulling reader's in.
I also like how this is basically a series of cliffhangers her, with all sorts of questions that leave you hanging, all in all, I think it contributes towards making a pretty nice piece here.
I'll end it with the one note that I could be slightly problematic here and that's this being one big paragraph. I feel like this needs to be in at least two if not three paragraphs for this message to be clear here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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I’m gathering that this is the introduction/overview. Which, if it is then you may need to mention in the title.
Where are the commas? There should be a comma after parties.
This sentence doesn’t flow well for me. There are too many commas.
This sounds really exciting and I hope you release the first chapter soon if you haven’t already – I’m off to check after posting this.
Keep writing. ☺
Interesting overview, but I would emphasize in the title that that's what this is (because you'll be turning this into a novel, correct?). In any case, this sounds a little Incarceron-esque or even somewhat similar to the Hunger Games or a multitude of other dystopian fiction, by that being said, I would be compelled to read this if it can be written with its own edge. I hope you end up seeing this storyline through to the end!
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver