Storm_Bringer

Woah. This is kind of bunched up. A few tips : 1)Every time a new person speaks a new paragraph is started. 2) You shouldn't have paragraphs that are super ...

Hello! Welcome to the site. Interesting poem here. It has a nice theme to it, although I can't really grasp what it is. :wink: So... you want to imagine and ...

Hello Lauren! This story is coming along very nicely. Dialogue punctuation: I believe I told you some links that may help? If not here: Right here! I think that is ...

Hello Masala!!! Welcome to the site!!!! :D Okay, first thing: You should only indent on the beginning of a paragraph. Not the whole thing. :wink: Another thing: When a new ...

Hey Holly! Well, this was very interesting, although I was confused with all the characters. You should add some discription to add to the characters so we know who is ...

Hello! Here as you asked! :D Wow. This was interesting! I loved the bird part and the characters were funny but a wee bit boring (only from there dialogue). Ummm, ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS!!! This poem is great. I feel like that too, when I'm new at school. Since you're new you might want to do a few things: 1. ...

Hello Catfood! Welcome to YWS!!!!! Let's get onto the review! They hope by the Grace of God, That they might be dying. :shock: Why would they hope they would be ...

Hey Erica! Welcome to YWS!!! (you are kind of new) :D Onto the review: There is no nitpicks. Good job on that. 1. This kinda of sounds like a whole ...

Hey, welcome to YWS!!!! Just some tips because you are kind of new. 1. For every post you must do two reviews. You probably haven't gotten any responses to this ...

Hello! Here as you asked. Wow. There were hardly any nitpicks. Good job on that! :D The (very few) Nitpicks! ‘Go on, that’s it, all you get for your money, ...

Hello! Wow. This is an interesting story. I liked it very much! Sheesh. Amanda sure is bossy. Is she spoiled, rich, and super pretty too? That's okay though. It's all ...

Hey Eraqio. Wow. This was quite a poem, I liked it with that heroes theme. Although it needs quite a bit of work. Nitpicks we're not superheroes anymore, were not ...

Hey Poem! :D Sorry it took awhile for this review. I turned off the watched topic so I didn't realize I had replies. Hehe. Nice poem you have here. It ...

Hello!!!! Wow. This story is coming along nicely. There could be more detail, make it longer but it's still good. Onto the Nitpicks! It was around 9:00 that night when ...