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A'right, so it seems Baby covered the grammatical errors already. In that case I'll review the content. The light and warm breeze ran through our hair. The foursome bounced all ...

Hello. Mind if I point out some grammatical mistakes? The sun shown outside Good word, but it's actually spelled (or spelt?) "shone". I ran down the stairs, my pants half ...

Hello there! While I'm no good at critiquing themes, I liked this. All right if I point out some typos? Choosing not be seen. Choosing not to be seen, right? ...

Hello, Waiting. Just let me say this is a nice piece. I'd tell you to define the character more, but you know the saying, "He's an everyman"? That's exactly what ...

Hello there, Captain. Would you like a second opinion? "No!" Sherlock shouted running his hand through his wavy brown hair quickly. This sentence could do without the 'quickly'. Mind you, ...

Hi, Becks. I read this and guess I'll try reviewing it. I don't have much to say, except that I like how Yumi turned out to be the most decent ...

Hi there, Dancing. I see you're new to the site, so welcome to YWS. I tuck tail an walk, walk away from everything. A good first sentence, but remember that ...

Hello there, Rebel. “There were billions of people and almost all of them were sick, not only in their minds, but their bodies too. Hopefully you'll explain this sentence later ...

I was going to review this, but it's pretty near perfect. So instead, I'm just going to like it and point something out. “What’s your name?” He’d asked Even though ...

An intriguing poem, this. There was only one error I spotted- if such it is. But as the clocked ticked Otherwise, a sound piece of work. Keep writing.

Hello, Fingle. (May I call you that?) This isn't a bad start- you seem to have no trouble with second person- but it could do with more detail. Just for ...

Sol, Sol. As usual, you've written a stellar piece (no pun intended). It is analyzable Er, is "analyzable" in the dictionary? Not that a simple fact like that should prevent ...

Hey there, Braden. I'm here to review as promised. He heard a scuffle behind him. He glanced over his shoulder to see a young man in a hoodie. It's actually ...

Hey, Nomster. I know this is a fan-fiction piece, but it should be more than a copy of the movie. There are lots of ways to make it your own- ...

Hey, brother! As far as grammar goes, there isn't much wrong with this. However- as a result one or two days down here you probably should put the word 'of' ...