"Gandalf, is there any hope for Frodo and Sam?" Pippin asked, worriedly.
"There never was much hope," Gandalf admitted. "Just a fool's hope."
Pippin smiled, then frowned.
"Why haven't they attacked yet?"
"It's the deep breath before the plunge," Gandalf explained, rubbing his hand over Pippin's sholder."The calm before Isangaurd is unleashed."
Suddenly, a flash of blue an green caught their attention. It was the storm, signaling Isangaurd's coming.
Pippin bit his lip and hoped that Frodo and Sam were some place safe.
Meanwhile, Frodo and Sam were far from safe. They were nearing Shebolb,the wicked spider's lair.
The climb up there was long and tiring, and Sam was becoming angry at Gollum for his lies and trickery.
Smeagol claimed that Sam had taken the last of there elvish bread, when Gollum had taken it and broken it until it was nothing but crumbs, wich he sprinkled on his cloak, and taking the rest wrapped in the leaf, threw it over the cliff.
Sam spotted him an became suspicious.
"What are you doing, sneaking around like that?" Sam questioned
"Nothing," Smeagol/Gollum snickered.
Hey, Nomster. I know this is a fan-fiction piece, but it should be more than a copy of the movie. There are lots of ways to make it your own- a new point of view, a sequel, or just a similar story.
Anyway, I'm here to review. Here goes.
I wouldn't do this. People who've seen the movie or read the book will know Shelob is coming. On the other hand, anyone who hasn't might not want to know what will happen yet.
Two problems with this- one, I think that part comes after Isengard was cleaned up. Two, you've misspelled it.
Don't just tell us he's suspicious. Make sure we can she how his eyes narrow, or his breath catches, or whatever. It's always better if we can get a clear picture in our minds.
I guess that's everything. Hope I've helped you write a better piece.
Stori
Come on, Stori. I was a dumb little kid back then.