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Re: These Steps
There is a grammatical error in the line : “are all that life has offer,”-this should either be “are all that life has to offer,” or “are all that life ...
Mar 18, 2006 -
Re: Ok Right So...
It was CRAZY boring.i found this piece of writing very casual and there was absolutrely no depth iin it. One more thing; I think you should know that there is ...
Feb 5, 2006 -
Re: When you were around
A good poem though of quite a common theme. I think some lines are a bit too long like,: “And how we'll meet again and how you will always love ...
Feb 5, 2006 -
Re: *Nothing*
Excellent…absolutely marvelous. I really like this kind of strange and unique writing and you did a wonderful job. I think the first paragraph was the best part of the entire ...
Jan 28, 2006 -
Re: Running without purpose
I found this weird…very weird. Is there more to this? Anyway the description was really lively and the helplessness of the girl was realistically expressed. I loved this: “It was ...
Jan 28, 2006 -
Re: The Silent Circus
Wow this piece was absolutely fantastic. I loved the way you made the funeral scene so lively in a unique and great way. There was an enchanting flow in it. ...
Jan 14, 2006 -
Re: Soon the Departure to Avalon
Splendid poem!! I loved it though I didn’t quite understand it to a great extent. I suppose there’s much between the lines but I couldn’t get them. Your writing style ...
Dec 28, 2005 -
Re: A Simple Gift
I found this story –how shall I put it-simple-quite simple. Anyway, you did a fine job by making this simple plot very realistic and lively. I’d like to point out ...
Dec 28, 2005 -
Re: Fate
Err…this is a very different kind of theme and I enjoyed reading it. Your writing style is really unusual but it appeals me a whale lot. In the 2nd paragraph, ...
Dec 26, 2005 -
Re: The Light at the End of the Tunnel
Poetic…very poetic. This poem is wonderful A bit more punctuation wouldn’t hurt-you can add some to make it better. Shouldn’t some sentences begin with a capital letter-especially at the beginni
Dec 17, 2005 -
Re: The Unexpected
the poem is ... unexpectedly good. er..there are 2 minor mistakes:"Unexpected, there you was infront of me "should be "Unexpected, there you were infront of me" and "too bad your ...
Dec 3, 2005 -
Re: My Road
It’s huge!!! Congratulations on writing such a big poem. I liked it and I admire your rhyming skill greatly- you rhymed all the way till the end!! The 3rd line-“There’s ...
Nov 19, 2005 -
Re: New Year's Death Song
I hate to be rude and I really hate to be rude but I think I’ve got no other option. Is this a story?? If yes; where on Jupiter is ...
Nov 12, 2005 -
Re: Robin Hood
A wonderful poem. Very imaginative and thoughtfully written. But you’ve not rhymed these lines: “He brought his men to the forest land, there Robin Hood met his foe again. He ...
Nov 12, 2005 -
Re: -Crumpled Dreams-
Awesome!!! Remarkable ideas!!! Incredible writing style!!! A fascinating story. I absolutely loved it. Great description skills. I’m amazed at this short and more than just sweet story. You’ve mis
Nov 6, 2005
