Snoink

Thank you, thank you. Actually I wrote this at two o'clock in the morning (which is late for me) and then sent it in. When I reread it, I was ...

Nope! Just remember to put it in the proper format the publisher wants. ^_^

Poor Neeko and Teeko!

I love how childlike it sounds. No offense, but you seem to have caught the simplicity of a child and the innocence.

And remember: post at least two critiques and get involved. Otherwise people will ignore your posts.

A- *sighs* Oh well, my other essays got A's.

The chapter was much too short. The prologue was of appropriate length, but... I don't like prologues. Perhaps if you combined the two it would be better?

Is this a stock story or not?

You used adjectives to your full advantage! Good job.

Yes but... I was giving my opinion! :lol: Listen to Reichieru. She's always right. :D

The best thing you can do is just to start writing. As you have it, I have no opinions about the story (except that sentence combination skills might be a ...

It's like most of the story is invisible. I can scroll up and I won't see anything, but when I scroll down, I can see a couple of things. It's ...

Chevy: I suppose it is a corny line, but I took the first two lines from a "friendship" spam email and then gradually transformed it into something really... dark. I ...

There was an error when I tried to get the story.

...why can't I see any of it?