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Yet another reason why you should NOT write poetry at one o'clock in the morning. Bad, bad... moment = movement I'm... stupid. :P

Ah! I suppose it helps to reread things, eh? "Nuntius shivered and he pulled up his hood so that It covered his long sandy coloured hair. " You can say ...

Yes, the first line realy does grab your attention, lol. What I had a problem with were the ampersands (&). Do you have to use them? I can't imagine what ...

Yes, the poem was supposed to sound sing-songyish. I love it when poetry does that. It makes a nice lulling tone. :) And the writing is very simple. If I ...

:O! Next time, mention something about Nitrogen Oxide. Pleeeeeeease? That's poetry enough for the whole poem!

Hehe! :D She's probably another 40 year old man. :P

It's very simple. You can't read in too deeply, but well... whatever. It's simple. OMG, WHAT IF MATT IS SIMPLE? How does she make it her? :shock:

:( *sniffles* I like critiquing things! You took it away from me! NOW YOU MUST DIE, FREDERICK THE EVIL BUTTER STICK!

Well... first of all, the grammar was... Wait, you didn't actually expect a real critique? XD

And then, the ultimate question comes... Have you made an outline for this story yet? Some writers absolutely go crazy when this question appears. "How dare you ask that of ...

The story of Lord of the Rings is awesome, perhaps even awesomer than Harry Potter, but at the same time, I like the Harry Potter books better. Why? To the ...

*grins* Congratulations!

Hehe! I'm a 17-year old girl. I met Beethoven last week, but it was completely different than this. We were both who we said we were, and it was fun. ...

Eh... one point was wrong. Ruby is a form of saphire, and is considered 8 in the Moh's hardness scale. It would be plenty hard enough to break a dagger. ...

Very interesting. Also, intensely readable, since it's so short. I just have one nitpick... For the first entry, you started out in third person and moved on to first. It ...