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Basically, my main comment is to put numbers in your titles if you're going to post them separately or else you'll confuse me. And that's bad. :( Also, look through ...

OMG! Yes, that is SO true. Yes, yes, yes, yes! A sweet sexuality... it's like nothing can please you as much as you can please yourself, and it's so sick ...

Hehehe! YES. Story polls should be banned. Why? Because usually they're just a sad pathetic thing like, "Do you hate my story?" and there's only two options and it's just ...

Well... if you need something to fix, maybe this line? "But to you others dare not to do the same." But seriously... this is good stuff. It has a bouncy ...

Man you guys are young, what's the deal!? Hehehe, we are young. That's the deal. ;) Still, the imagery is pretty good. Just listen to xanthan... she's right on cue.

Um... yeah. Apparently I'm a little late. >< Still! Hopefully my comments will help you later on? She ran along the windswept beach of silky sand and swollen sky, speckled ...

HA! Finally read it. Told you I wasn't *completely* lazy! Anyway, this is my favorite line of the whole thing: "BWAHAHAHA--*coughcoughchokesplutter*--AHAHA!!!" I think it effectly summarizes the entir

Yes... I am finally getting to my stack of stuff to critique. Amazing, isn't it? And the invisible enemy had taken the love of his life from him barely five ...

*grins smugly* I always knew I would be the start of the apocalypse! w00t! Er... yeah. I'll show you what death really is later... when I critique the story. ;)

I would probably write this: A dance by children long gone A dance with ribbons long lost A dance to celebrate a day that never came As this: A dance ...

XD I'm loving those ninjas... That was like, the funniest part of the whole story. It's like, everyone had their own thoughts about the ninjas and you got introduced to ...

As this was happening, a little girl wandered through the trees. The jovial mood evaporated, turned malicious and sinister. Before anyone could do anything though, the girl’s concerned mother called

Since this is not in the debate and serious discussion usergroup, I will assume that it is fair game to critique. Fine? ;) Anyway, I found this to be a ...

This is begging to be expanded... Nice introduction you have there. It introduces the scene fairly well and makes me want to go to San Francisco (it's hot here!) Still, ...

Ooh, this was a fun read! Intensely creative too... it feels like it ought to be in a children's book, but then that doesn't sound right because then I would ...