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I told you I would come look at your work! :D Anyway, like I said, I am a little bit of a meanie-pants when it comes to critiques, not because ...

Okay! So I have a style very much like yours. Run on sentences? Check! Lots of repetition? Check! And I like this style because you can make everything seemed rushed ...

Okay! So just a few comments from me. ;) So I won't go into the grammar stuff, because honestly that sort of stuff is a bit boring and I don't ...

Awww... this is cute. I like it. Very Shel Silverstein-esque. If the ending wasn't so funny, mind you, it wouldn't work at all, but this was very fun. The only ...

Wait... how are you exactly supposed to cry so as to get tears on said rose? It doesn't really make sense if you think about it. Raindrops, dew, anything can ...

Hehehe! Funny poem! :D The biggest thing would be some of the metering seems forced and whatnot. The odd stanzas were good--the even stanzas sucked. So yay? I shall be ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D You're going to want to read the rules which can be found on every forum. Basically, it says that you have to post two ...

Geep! You write like a girl! Which is good but... I thought that the POV was a girl's at first! It really doesn't make any sense as a guy's POV, ...

Oooo! Pretty! :D And then, the world ended.

Awwwwwww.... Michael is such a cutie! Alex shouldn't be allowed to wear speedos. Yup! And 409? Oh dear... I don't want to know either. Ann acts like me around babies, ...

Hey Icaruss! Nice poem you have. I always like it how you can read it and see the latin influences, so it's awesome. The beginning is catchy, though I will ...

Awww.... so cute! Here is where the rhythm went a little weird: She begs her parents for a pet and befriends any beast. and Although I know my inner child, ...

So! I saw your blog and see you wanted to rewrite your story because it is "embarrassing." So, I figured I would give you a heads up on what exactly ...

You can't just edit out the last stanza because it's too political! I mean, that's the whole punch of your poem. It would be like getting rid of the ending ...

Haha, I welcomed you in the welcome threads, and then I found out that nobody critiqued your works! What a shame! So I will. And I think I am a ...