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Hey jemjive! :D I think this would be awesome if, instead of just telling us about the scar that you have, you would tell us how and why you got ...

Hey BigM! First of all, a nitpick! Weeds convert carbon dioxide to oxygen as well! In fact, most of the oxygen produced on this Earth is by grass... which is ...

Good start, good start... but you need more destruction and stuff. This is simply not a finished story! This is the introduction! You need: - Deepening conflict. - A resolution ...

Hey Ikafe! :D First of all: whoa! Back up! This persona actually... killed her lover???? OMG. That is so completely dramatic! The first thing I'm wondering is why? I mean... ...

Biffle! Where are all the carrots? There are definitely not enough carrots in here! And dams! Where are all the dams? Don't you dare censor yourself! All in all, I ...

Lol! No, it doesn't have to be the best and it doesn't have to be correct. I like what Scott Adams said about it: "Creativity is allowing yourself to make ...

Hey fries (again)! I couldn't leave chapter 1 part 1 all by itself, could I? ;) Okay! So first of all, I want to comment on a little grammatical nitpick ...

Hey fries! :D Okay! So first of all, I want more drama! Right now, she has this terrifying dream, which makes it a really dramatic opening! But then she wakes ...

Hey seana! One thing you really need to do is to write in correct grammar. Right now, it's really hard to tell what you're saying because you don't capitalize the ...

Hey Violet June! I read this the other day, but didn't comment because I was kind of blown away! The second section made me kind of squirmy, which is totally ...

Hey Emma Louise! :D I like the contrast between rich and poor, especially when you state how lonely she is, yet how envied it she is anyway! It really sends ...

Hey Howler! Babies are indeed cute! :D With that said, the one thing that I found kind of annoying about this poem was how self-centered it is. I don't know... ...

Hey Inkwell! The thing about this poem is that each stanza contains a completely new idea that you could probably expand into a completely different poem, if that makes sense. ...

Hey StoryWeaver! This is a really cute poem! Very Shel Silverstein-esque (trust me, that's a good thing!) so I really like it! Now, to make this more magical, I think ...

Hey Lancelot! Interesting beginning! I like how it dumps us right in the conflict... it's a good thing and I'm glad you're not waiting around for anything! :D One of ...