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Hey ladyworkz! This poem is as confusing as whatever you are talking about! I mean, I know that you are talking about some sort of conflict, but I can't really ...

Hey defend! One thing I noticed with this was the lack of chorus... and obviously I'm looking at this without knowing the music or how it would be played or ...

Hey Kea! Sorry for not critiquing this sooner! :D So, I was reading this and thinking, "Hmmmmmmm." Because this really reminds me of what I did with my novel, at ...

Hey VioletJune! I'm not sure if I would call this a story... it kind of reminds me of a monologue, like in a play or something! Like, a character just ...

Hey Tale! :D I didn't read your note at first and I was thinking, "Wow, these would be great lyrics, if they were in a country song!" And then I ...

Hey Pencil! :D That's awesome! I haven't read a good ghost story in a while, so I'm glad you posted this! Though, you should probably fix the title. You got ...

Hey Eli! This is a good start, but it is by no means a final draft! The next question you should ask yourself is WHY is this particular image important? ...

Hey w5aly! One of the things I'm not sure about is that you say Anger and Hatred steal away Happiness... but how? I think that's a dramatic story that needs ...

Hey Jon! With a short poem, you can't over-use words. And you've definitely over-used "darling." Also you said "that too" and then referred to "that" as "them" which doesn't make ...

Hey Sense! Okay, so maybe this is just me, but if a guy did this to me... OMG. It would be bad. Because she's all shy and stuff and then ...

It's perfectly okay to repost it again, especially considering the amount of work that you've put into this draft! :) What a rotten owner! I think you would have been ...

Eek, Zibbie! I think you're off-topic. The paradox of progress means that the more we progress, the more we have complications related to our progression which ends up inhibiting us. ...

LOL! I love how she grabs her dad's pistol... that's just awesome! Anyway, the main thing is I would really like a more exciting introduction, if that makes sense. We ...

Hi Silented! I really like the math parts and I wish you would continue more of the math! Like... you go from addition to fractions to algebra. OMG. And then! ...

Hey tgolden! I voted "kind of." That is, I really love Spanish in poetry. I do! Spanish poetry is what brought me into poetry in the first place! However, I ...