SkyeDreamer

This was such a different poem! I have only one nitpick, and it's that you'd make nouns full sentences. examples: Close. Eyes. or Begin. Again. or (especially this one for ...

This is an interesting poem. Everyone has already pointed out most of my nitpicks, so I'll just say this is cute. I especially liked the ending! I think this poem ...

This is good! One thing: crums should be crumbs. Other than that, I found no errors I needed to point out. It was a little confusing, because at first I ...

This was truly incredible. It was so depressing, so real, so... wonderfully terrible. This must be the best thing I've read on YWS. Now, for the nitpicks- sorry :(. My ...

This was really, really cute. It reminded me of my cats (especially when they were kittens), and how great an animal friend can be. I assume this was intentional, but ...

I'm sorry, but I disagree with Persephoneia. If this is "almost disappointing" for your work, then I want to read lots more. I am generally more of a poetry person ...

I haven't read the other chapters, but this still drew me in. First of all, I love the name "Ashling." It's uncommon and very pretty. I loved your word choices ...

Yes, yes, YES. I love it! Sometimes, people make an opinion about Christians before even getting to know us. But we're more than just soft-spoken people who walk around saying, ...

This is a great metaphor! I'm assuming that God is the artist and He does His work through you. I love that! I also assume that you're fairly new, so... ...

I like the concept of it, but I agree that it needs to flow better. The last line in the first stanza really doesn't work (for me), but I don't ...

And beg, as like a street rat, he should stay./Humiliation, then, my being be. I love this part! I can't really say why, I just really liked the wording of ...

Hey! I liked this; it was easy to relate to, and even though it was simple, it somehow kept me interested. Sure, it was short. Maybe it could have been ...

I liked the way you were able to tell a lovely story in just a few words. I always think it would be interesting to write a really short poem ...

This. was. incredible!! It was simpler, but still had great feeling and imagery. I thought it was the perfect length- some people might have thought it was too long, and ...

I'm always really drawn to books about ballet dancers, so I figured I'd read this. I really enjoyed it. There were some mistakes with grammar, punctuation, etc. so you may ...