Little paws

Awwww, total cuteness!! This poem is SO adorable. It's simple, but that's what makes it sweet. I was thinking of an adorable little Lab puppy when I was reading it, and I was thinking that sometimes simplicity is best when it comes to things like this. Great job with it!

I love this poem. It's simple but sweet. My favourite part was

Animallovermary wrote:Not seeing us eye to eye,
But feeling us heart to heart.

Excellent work. I really can't critique this, because I got it. I have a dog, and this really described how I feel.

Not seeing us eye to eye,
But feeling us heart to heart.

She understands us better
Than anyone ever could,

Hello Animallovermary,

This was really good and I liked reading it. I thought it was very sweet and simple and expressed the feelings in your head in a good way that used creative language. I like the imagery and sweet little words that you included to make it that extra bit more special. You should be very proud of this because it is really good. I have no criticism for you, it was very neat. I love how you repeated little paws at the end of the poem to emphasis the previous line. Keep up the amazing, descriptive language and good grammar that you used in this, I really hope to read more of your writing.

From CuteJackRussell

This was really, really cute. It reminded me of my cats (especially when they were kittens), and how great an animal friend can be. I assume this was intentional, but I liked how you made it relatable to both dogs and cats- and other animals, too. I also really liked the innocence and shortness of this piece; it made it really personal and... alive and real. This was kind of... heartwarming, in a simple, subtle kind of way. So, great! I loved this. Tell your pet hello, from another animal lover. (And personally, I think this is good enough to be on the home page. So let's make it happen, people!)

She strolls around
On little paws
Not seeing us eye to eye,
But feeling us heart to heart.This is my favorite line.
She may have a tail,
She may walk on four legs,
But her heart is a big as ours.
She understands us better
Than anyone ever could,
Little paws.

Hey, your poem was very cute! I love how you discribe that no matter what it may look like, whats on the inside it counts! I think the message is really well put, and that you probably could discribe the scene better. Over all, great poem!

Normally I'd probably attack you for lack of proper punctuation or grammar or something, but this is perfect just the way it is I think. Very short and sweet - love it, and it reminds me a lot of my own pet

Thanks for commenting!

Hello!

This poem is really, really sweet. Not only that, you've written it in a very simplistic way as well, everything you have to say is written in the most simple way there is and that's really good. I also think that the simpleness of it all adds to sweetness of the poem, the way animals are potrayed through such an innocent narrator.

I don't really have any criticism on this piece really, you wrote a poem. The poem was briliant, simple, sweet and effective. Keep it up!

Nice poem,And the title is very catchy made me want to read it. Keep up the good work and keep on writing

What a cute poem, I was very tempted to go "awhhhhh" out loud. Very well done, the content, flow, wording, it was a genuine good poem. Congrats, I loved it. Keep Writing!

Hi,

Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here.

This is really beautiful. It flowed very well and the sentiment came across strongly. The final line was very effective.

My only suggestion is that it might be interesting to expand on this for the sake of experimentation, maybe break it into stanzas and elaborate on each image. This works well in and of itself, but it may be worth exploring further just for the sake of seeing what happens.

A lovely read. I hope to read more of you soon, and please feel free to p.m me if you have any questions!

Hope this helps,

Jas