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I really enjoyed reading this. It was beautifully touching and tangible as well. I think I recognized some dark/watery images from a poem of Clau's? To the edge, getting somewhere ...

I don't mean any offense here, but this poem is a train wreck. Roughly 3/4 fourths of your lines are repeated over and over. Repetition is a poetic device, but ...

The poem here seems to be all in the title. Don't get me wrong, the title itself it fantastic, it's the reason I read this poem. But the actual poem ...

I didn't think this was bad at all -- in fact I loved it. The one thing I think you could do is strengthen some of your descriptions, as some ...

This was fantastic, EBM! You used powerful language and showed a great poetry-writing competency in general (Are you sure you don't write poetry often? Because you should!). I'm going to ...

Snoink, you are my new hero. Fantastic! Well-thought out, and witty to perfection. Perhaps for the title? Alternative History: How the Wooden Horse Never Came to Be Seems a little ...

This was absolutely beautiful, Colleen -- I loved it. In fact, I only have the tiniest little nit-pick for you: in III, the word "frozen" seemed very out of place. ...

Yes, please don't start a debate -- this is not the place. I, for one, enjoyed this in a wickedly morbid way. I agree with Jack when he said the ...

How could I resist a title like this? ;) The only complaint I have is the "hand/hand" rhyme in the first stanza. I realize it's a ghazal, and that rhyming ...

Haha, I might take you up on that -- I had meant to crit this way earlier, but somehow ... forgot. Anyways, I really enjoyed this. In fact, I'd be ...

Sweet stuff! One note on the formatting: you could try changing the font color on the ellipses to white, that way they're not so glaringly apparent. :) I love the ...

This is a very interesting poem. The one big issue I had with it was the excess of stops (periods, basically) that messed up what could have been a lovely ...

I liked this. The only thing that stuck out to me at the first look-through was the word "blue" used twice in the same stanza. Since the blue is need ...

Pretty! I know if someone sang this to me for my birthday, I'd probably love them forever. :D Anyways, I'm not really familiar with critting lyrics, so we'll see how ...

All right, only a couple things here: The black clothing and the bags no doubt arouse d the suspicion s of the supervisor conveniently [s]stood[/s] standing behind the counter, his ...