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Thank you, all your advice will be heeded. And of course I will read :D! thanks!

Hiya! This was beautiful! I really loved the pattern you had! I honestly have no critique, but I have to say that it was truly inspirational. Thewritersdream

This is really good!!

This gave a whole lot of suspense, it is a good suspense story and is actually a little scary, at least for me :P. Of course I love the intensity ...

This is absolutely amazing! Everything you said was completely true. We do water it down when we look at things through our mortal eyes, when we weigh what he did ...

It's amazing! I love the fact that the words were painful; it was just so real. And I always love poetry that has something deeper within, also the connection with ...

Thank you for your advice! I already made some changes!

Thank you! :)

You have no idea how much your message meant to me!!! Thank you, and what you said was true. I changed the sentence a little by adding a pause. I'll ...

Thank you both SOO much!!! I am truly grateful for all the constructive criticism. :D And Cal, Lexis is right, Timmy is a boy in her daughters class, I think ...

No problem! I understand and all your advice was excellent. I will try to update it soon, which will be as soon as I can since I'm swarmed with work. ...

I agree with both reviews! I just practically scribbled this down. It is very amateur (maybe unskilled could be rethought) to write her mother was a wanna be actress. The ...

Very good. I think it could use a little more emotion. But other than that it is great! Continue the good story!

Please keep it going! It's really good. I enjoyed how it's very character like, please bring this girl out more and continue writing about it! :)

I think it the poem is very nice! I believe that you would be a great Phantom Poem writer. I believe that would fit you well because the repetition helps ...