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Re: In Memory
I like your start (the first line), my only issue is that it feels like it's missing something, but I'm not quite sure what. Maybe a 'that' before "we", but ...
Feb 6, 2016 -
Re: I Don't Want to be Better
Hey! This is a review, but not on the poem structure but more on the ideology. I like the poem, expecially some of the lines like, I would rather be ...
Sep 12, 2015 -
Re: I Believe
Hey! Your review as I said I would do. I go from stanza to stanza when I can. Okay, so one thing with your poem I noticed is the pattern/flow/rhythm ...
Apr 26, 2015 -
Re: My Sister's Skin is Darker Than Mine
Hi! I know you have a lot of reviews on this, and I said below I agree with a lot of Morrigan's points, but I still feel like I have ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: cold feet + guests
I am going to attempt to review this. I find it so difficult to even write a coherent comment after reading one of your works. It's so beautiful and inspiring ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: Just a Drop of Ink
WELCOME TO YWS!! I like this poem! I am going to give you a review, though, on how you could format it and some tips on the writing. Before I ...
Feb 13, 2015 -
Re: Planet Wars.1.
Review here, as said! I'm just gonna jump right into it. *note* if I change something as a suggestion for editing within a quote, it will be in bold to ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: it
I like the way you formatted this, but I agree with the reviewer below, your direct message seems quite confusing, while I know what you're saying, the way you ended ...
Sep 22, 2014 -
Re: I Saw You #2
Okay, first of all, I really like this! I think you really did a great job at making the reader think you were talking about another person looking at someone, ...
Sep 19, 2014 -
Re: It's Better
This review is going to give me my next star, so I love you, writer! xD -*- First off I feel like if you had spaced it out a little ...
Sep 11, 2014 -
Re: Why Christianity Is A Lie: A Comprehensive Breakdown of the Failures Within Christianity Part 1
Hi! : ) First of all, I just wanted to say that whoever of the Christian faith has hurt you, I am so sorry. I know that Christian's have brought ...
Sep 11, 2014 -
Re: I Swear I Lived
I love this so much I am crying! I love the song by One Republic and when I first saw the title I thought it was a cheesy add-on to ...
Sep 4, 2014 -
Re: Bah Humbug
So apparently I just don't get it. Shouldn't have written why.
Sep 1, 2014 -
Re: Independence Day and the Irony Thereof
This was beautiful! I don't know the situation with Kashmir and India...I haven't even been to that part of the world, but I really loved how you wrote and what ...
Aug 15, 2014 -
Re: Daddy
I understand some of your sentiment here, but I would suggest not making it a rhyming poem. Rhythm poems for deeply felt emotions can become typical and uninteresting. They don't ...
Aug 9, 2014
