Silberfee

What aspect of the chapter are you conflicted with? Anyway here are my impressions of it. I felt that this sentence's informal tone stuck out of the chapter, it didn't ...

HI I haven't read your previous chapters but I hope I will be of help despite that ! I assume that Danara isn't related to Agatha because they refer to ...

Hi I'll do my best to review your story !! At the beginning I thought that the protagnist fainted because of a medical condition and I thought that the medical ...

If the body was all that consciousness was, why can clinically brain-dead people sometimes still perceive their senses apart from their body? Itthink this is because the brain stem which ...

Hi I have read a few chapters already from your story so I'll do my best to review this chapter. Juno is portrayed as the more energetic and dominant character ...

I agree with the previous reviewer I like how you left this poem in lowercase...I'll have a go at interpreting it correct me if I'm wrong - the lowercase does ...

it isn't necessary to put a comma in this sentence: 'It was like, something wrapped his hole body.' Also surely you meant to write 'whole,' instead of 'hole.' 'watching to ...

I love the eloquency of the language used. I guess that this poem is about death? I assume that Jack and Sam are brothers and you juxtapose both their experiences ...

Heey again Ok I love the fact that both the protagnists have a love for classical music I think its underrated (I know classical is hard to appreciate but everyone ...

Hi! I didn't expect this song to have such a dark ending! Although the song doesn't have a melody or rhythm up here with the lyrics I can imagine the ...

Hi! I am kicking myself for not having read your story sooner I seen it come up loads of times in the Green room but I just thought it was ...

Hi! You have a very effective rhythm here and it parallels the subject of your poem, and I can imagine each short sentence symbolising the months you spent at each ...

Hi, I liked the format, it was an interesting choice to write a paragraph for each time (later I thought it was fitting for the job of the protagonist as ...

I really liked the visual imagery at the beginning, the description of scenery sets the pace for the story later but I'm a bit confused by the middle bit - ...

Hi! This is a very touching poem I liked the visual imagery you integrated in the poem: 'wings/mountain height,' contrasted with 'I could but not to fly,' but as someone ...