Shinigamizm

For me this is about trees. The descriptive of 'gnarled' and 'older than time' gave me that idea, if I'm wrong then that's fine, one of the best things about ...

I won't lie, I found Jane Austen's 'Emma' to be a terrible bore. However, the worst book I've read is probably 'Brisingr' by Chris Paolini. I read on after Eragon ...

I agree, you should definitely be proud of it! It's very whimsical and you show a great amount of wit and control. I loved all of your rhyming and it ...

I agree with ballerina13, there didn't seem to be much emotion behind the words. There were some good images presented in this piece but I don't feel anything about them ...

I think this is clever, and I think I can see what you're writing to do with it, but for me the presentation is awkward. The A- B- S-'s etc. ...

Enjoyed this, but structurally it could do with some work. You have a comma in every single of the poem when you don't need half of them. Try reading it ...

I like this, it has a postmodern feel to it, it's very contemporary in its style. A couple of things I'll suggest - you have two examples of white things ...

I like to think you made the spelling & grammatical mistakes on purpose - if you didn't then I'd suggest getting someone to proofread your work for you before you ...

Part of me thinks the gap between each line hinders the piece, and the rest of me likes it because it seems to represent the narrator's state of mind. I ...

This is excellent - I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Perhaps the reason it has no reviews is because it's so high quality! I have a couple of suggestions, though I ...

I like this, the idea is great. I agree with niteowl concerning your rhyming - I actually didn't notice the rhyme the first time I read it through. It just ...

I like this, the rhyming is predictable but not badly done, you did a good job. :) I'm unsure what the poem is about, though? Is it about a particular ...

Absolutely beautiful - your imagery and metaphors seem so effortless. I adore the final stanza, I think the final line is a great closing for the piece. I think there's ...

Unlike the person above me, I didn't like the ending! It's the only line that felt awkward and out of place to me. Aside from that line, I thoroughly enjoyed ...

I like this - especially the following stanza: "I walk, walk, run, walk Incessantly walk for time immemorial" I think you could benefit from some punctuation in places, particularly at ...