ShaydeDesiree

[quote="XavierJohnson123"] Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand. [/quote] I loved this qoute. It explains it so well. I am only 15, but I know what ...

I wrote a similar poem, and I have to say I know how you feel. But I didnt really like the ending. It was too much "in your face" and ...

I dont want to be rude, but I didnt like it. It just wasnt as good as some of your other writing. There are some spelling mistakes that I noticed. ...

I loved this poem. The deeper meaning behind it made it even better. my favorite lines have to be; "I've been taken advantage of, I've been hurt and scorned. I ...

"But if forever was a day, I don't want to love you that way." I think this is the best quote throughout the piece. But i did love the full ...

Dramma pointed out the mistakes for me. :) But i loved it, it is spontaneous, and fun. It put a smile on my face and that was what it was ...

This poem captures the jist of depression, but if you want it to really touch someone, I would add a lot more. there are a few spelling errors, such as ...

This was an excellent piece for written so late at night. it made my cry! it was a shock when she said "Mom's dead". It brought back memories of when ...

This is beautifully written. I lost my father two years ago but it was kind of instant. but this still brings tears to my eyes. Its so raw and true. ...

The story was told very well but they rhyming was off. I will not say it ruined the story but it did take away from it. There are some splling ...

This is a short but sweet poem. I think it was great. I dont know how this fits into dramatic poetry but I loved it! It made me laugh and ...

This poem is very well written. But the ending was kind of blunt. I felt like i wanted more out of it before she fell. "And Jake is weeping into ...