ShakespeareWallah

I really love your prose. It is lyrical and somewhat straightforward. Not boring, as you'd like to think. You give details, but not in the shopping-list method. You use the ...

Hello, You have good content here, that's for sure. The holiday-misery stuff, if executed well, can be very moving and touching. I sit on the steps at the top of ...

Hello SunsetSprite, okay, this is a very cute and a very mind boggling story. The thing about stories based on songs is that you must not steer the actual story ...

Hi Lebensborn, It's a very nicely written story. I enjoyed reading it a lot. Did you make the elderly lady comment on Mathew's sexuality so that, later when when the ...

Hi Sprite, This is the first chapter of your Novel, so this should be interesting and captivating. You have a good storyline, I feel. Your main problem is grammar. Also, ...

Hey Myst, This is a really good start, and it seems quite interesting. This is good. I just want to point out some of the things that bothered me a ...

Hey there, So I went to seventh grade with a a pair of twins too. And one of them had an extra thumb. (coincidence much?) But we never gave much ...

Hey there, Wordplay. The title had wordplay. That brought me in, even though it was "twilight". I, for one and had(?) no clue as to who these people were. But ...

Hello Americas, I love reading stuff like this. I got this feeling that I get when I read memoirs. It was honest-the whole thing-seeing that it was all real. Come ...

Hey Gaurav, It was not an a usual time for Philip that evening.Four people were dragging Philip s with rods in their hands. " Do not let him slip off ...

Hello Umaima, “Hide me” I said as I rushed behind the curtains where Drake stood “Fast, somewhere, anywhere” According to my knowledge, the Narrator is already behind the curtains. Then ...

Hi Renee, I wrote a review on these a couple of days ago but due to net problems, it didn't come out. Sorry that you didn't get it earlier. It ...

Hey Hazaar, sorry for being late. I like the prologue bit. But taking in the extremely short part of the first chapter, I feel it would sound more natural if ...

Hey Renee, Hope you're enjoying your time here. I'm Puck.Nice to meet you. Okay, Now onto the story. The obvious problem here is the use of apostrophes. You have fixed ...

Hey there, I thought it was a nice enough story. I like the plot and you have some interesting things going on. I liked the narrators voice. It was dry ...