ShadowKnight155

The fifth stanza(although powerful) doesn't jive. It breaks it up, but be careful changing it, you could ruin the poem. It is a very powerful stanza. It could just be ...

Personally, I think it's perfect, if you re-wrote. Just kidding. You pulled off repetition rather well. The only thing that I really don't like is the "black instead of blue" ...

Very nice, but I do have to say: I guess I'm lucky I've barely read any books with MCs like this! At my school we're forced to read so much, ...

Travellers Travelers Two travellers travelers were hiking upon a dirt path that wound its way through a forest. They walked for days, and eventually reached a shallow river. A thin ...

I can see the(what looks like without reading the spoiler) hypocrisy. I often question freedoms and there meanings. You did a good job at the start, but like you said, ...

Very nice, I liked it. The Imagery is fast, and descriptive enough for me to get a picture, it's like when you see a movie and they flash a bunch ...

I have to say it held me until the end. It almost seemed like to much information, but Lethero said it didn't have enough. You need to reposition the descriptions. ...

Best books ever(and when I read it, as well as description): Speak:Laurie Halse Anderson-This year-A girl in ninth grade, a little "sexual" if that bothers you; best book ever Eleanors ...

Do you know what sickens me? People who give up on reading great things like this, just because it is hard to understand or has big words. This was amazing, ...

Awesome, nothing like classic rhyming poetry. Nothing to say, it is somehow perfect, I thought it was impossible. I don't think you should capitalize all the lines. That is the ...

Well, after reading Kafkaescence's review, I have an ammendment to one of his points, or likely more to clarify what he said, we probably mean the same thing: It blends ...

Well, since I am still new, my reviews stink, or at least in terms of correcting grammar and spelling, or else your just that good. I might suggest not capitalizing ...

Great Imagery. A lot of times I have seen that said, but here, it was extraordinary. I read it, but I don't remember the words. I remember the "visions in ...

I didn't like it. Why? Because when I don't get something, I don't like it. A sad consequence of my terrible overly-analytical philosophies. Great Imagery, if I wasn't me, I ...

Personally, It was great, I don't know your other works as I haven't been here that long, (and Im too lazy to look them up right now,I am late and ...