SeraphTree

I agree with all previous statements. :D I love you. And I lust after you. Okay, THIS^^^^^^^^^ is giving two contradictory images. HOW can you both love and lust after ...

It's good. At first, I thought it was going to be a bit preachy, but it's good :D:D:D:D I suggest you get into depth with this. Repeating "God knew that ...

Intersting. A bit confusing, but interesting. "I'm Brooke," the girl whispered into Nightmare's ear as if she could define the human words. Brooke gently stroked Nightmare's black coat, back and ...

I suggest you take out the 'Hector: Jesus:' part. Instead, have the Lord's words in italics, throughout the song. That way, it can be a surprise at the end. Other ...

Very good. Love the reference to Pink Floyd :D:D:D The only thing is... I think you can do better with the end. It sounds a little preachy, making it kill ...

Ah... I see. You need to go into depth with this Hearts. All we can see is the anger, and anger is usually a mask for another emotion. :smt056 Why ...

:D My first suggestion... really go into depth here. Why do you miss the person so much? Do you feel guilt, confusion, apprehension? We need to know what you feel. ...

Interesting. :D:D I think you can show a lot more with this. I mean, we can tell you care about the person, and that they are gone for some reason. ...

Welll... I didn't read the whole thing. :(:(:(:(:(:( The magnitude of the Nedra doesn't really hit. I mean, it just sounds like a giant lion with super powers. :D Read ...

Interesting piece. :D I gazed down at the brightly lit underground city from my perch on the top of an apartment building. This seems a bit crammed together. The many ...

Interesting. :D:D:D She, herself, was one, and never knew her real father This is confusing. Is she a celebrity love child, or just a love child? Also, it makes your ...

Interesting. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D I ran outside and let out a gasp as I saw slow flakes as big as my palm and softer and lighter than a feather spiral down around ...

CHAYONZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Haven't heard from you in a while. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D How are you? Nami woke with a start. She looked at her opened door through which Hart had just come throu

Sorry about that... anyway, on to the crit :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D It was hovering in the dusty air, fingers clenching and unclenching. A sickly wave of dark magic washed over me, but ...

Love the last line.:D You say to me that life is a breeze, but mine has turned to a storm. You say for me to take a break, but this ...