A Little poem I wrote...

by Brit20002004

Published December 20, 2007

I miss you
Please come home
I miss you
Why did you leave me all alone
I miss you
Why did you have to say goodbye
I miss you
Please tell me why
I miss you
You are the one I love
I miss you
All I want is just a little hug
I miss you....

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SeraphTree
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SeraphTree wrote a review Review · Dec 20, 2007

:D

My first suggestion... really go into depth here. Why do you miss the person so much? Do you feel guilt, confusion, apprehension? We need to know what you feel. :D
We know nothing of the situation, so this piece sounds a bit like 'poor me' writing. :D Give us a little background, i.e. a flashback, a letter, an arguement, etc.
PM me if you need anything :D:D:D:D



Love is friendship that has caught fire. It is quiet understanding, mutual confidence, sharing and forgiving. It is loyalty through good and bad times. It settles for less than perfection and makes allowances for human weaknesses.
— Ann Landers