A Little poem I wrote...

by Brit20002004
  • December 20, 2007
  • Poetry
  • Other

I miss you
Please come home
I miss you
Why did you leave me all alone
I miss you
Why did you have to say goodbye
I miss you
Please tell me why
I miss you
You are the one I love
I miss you
All I want is just a little hug
I miss you....

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SeraphTree
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SeraphTree wrote a review · Thu Dec 20, 2007 11:40 pm

:D

My first suggestion... really go into depth here. Why do you miss the person so much? Do you feel guilt, confusion, apprehension? We need to know what you feel. :D
We know nothing of the situation, so this piece sounds a bit like 'poor me' writing. :D Give us a little background, i.e. a flashback, a letter, an arguement, etc.
PM me if you need anything :D:D:D:D



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